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Head heavy with brick
causing my lungs to freeze,
now filled by air thick

as dust, and no longer can breathe
while the question spins
and I lose track of all these

answers. The wall strengthens
itself or else crumble
away and failing anticipations

the route is blocked by rubble
and I am stuck.
The small response’s fumble

is lost within the thawing muck
of liquid thoughts and through this process
my tongue is struck.
:iconthequietwriter:
One of the few decent poems that came out of my poetry class last fall semester.
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:icondragonfly72:
Whoa, I liked this... It's very intense, really felt this way sometime, can't remember when. I just remember the feeling, tongue-tied while words wash over you and you just don't know what to make of them. Total love ^_^
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:iconssejbat:
there is a feeling this creates which is effective and i liked it however there are several gramatical errors which could be corrected to improve it! weldone!
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~TheQuietWriter Sep 16, 2008  Professional Interface Designer
Yeah, I know the grammar isn't perfect. It was all I could do to keep the rhyming scheme going.

Thank you!
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I am definitely a fan of the style and can relate to the words. I like. Nice work!
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~TheQuietWriter Apr 22, 2008  Professional Interface Designer
Thank you so much! I put a lot of work into this poem.
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